雅思范文：犯罪的原因是先天的还是环境影响的，附雅思句型-平行结构解析！

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  雅思范文题目：

  Some think that most crime is the result of circumstances such as poverty and other social problems. Others believe that most crime is caused by people who are bad by nature. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

  一些人认为大多数犯罪是因为环境，比如说贫困和其他社会问题。其他人认为这些人本质是坏的。讨论双方观点并给出自己的看法。

  

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  7.5分范文

  　1.周围的环境引起犯罪：贫困；择业难；校园暴力；枪支泛滥等

  　　2.本性就是坏人：人性本恶，有人天生就是注定犯罪的

  　　解析：两种观点讨论；必须支持给出的一方观点。

  　　两种观点讨论布局图：

  　　首段：背景介绍(个性开篇)+争议焦点(淡化模板)+ 作家立场(清晰表达)

  　　二段：正方观点的展开(三点展开，细节例证支持)

  　　三段：反方观点展开(二点展开，他人口吻，细节例证支持)

  　　尾段：再次亮明观点 + (总结理由)

  　　作家观点：支持犯罪是由于贫困和社会环境引起的。

  　　思路拓展：

  　　贫困和社会问题导致犯罪 = 外因引起犯罪：

  　　1. 贫困的家庭孩子没有受到良好教育，不能明辨是非，容易被引入迷途。

  　　2. 科技发展，传媒多元，色情暴力节目的传播，毒害心灵，误导人生观，诱发犯罪冲动。

  　　3. 枪支泛滥，为犯罪提供了便利，例如，在一些西方国家，枪支买卖合法。

  　　人性本恶=内因引起犯罪：

  　　1. 有人认为，人性本恶，嫉妒，贪婪，自私，都是人的固有本质，一旦在后天被激发，没有正确的引导，会导致一些反社会行为的发展。

  　　2. 例如，女性经济犯罪；黑社会大哥的惯性犯罪，报复社会，诅咒和憎恨他们认为不公平的社会

  　　Alarmingly, various stories concerning crimes have been pushing into spotlight. Conflicting ideas clash in finding out the root causes of misdeeds. My stand is that external reasons have a bigger influence on those misconducts. Nobody is born to be a criminal.

  　　My arguments could be easily explored. One contributing factor triggering manifold malefactions could be owed to the external circumstances in which the one is raised. To put in details, in some poverty-stricken or violent families, children are usually not properly taken care of and they stand few chances of receiving fine education, it is likely that such children may easily be led astray and even worse, they may conduct some anti-social offences. Still, pornographic or otherwise vulgar forms of media, have a really adverse impact on the young because the young can, in most cases, find it rather difficult to make positive choices about the types of influences in their lives, thus，it is possible for them to turn to a life of crime. Last, many perilous products that could be harnessed commit crimes are very easily and cheaply available to the youths. In fact, guns are sold in a number of stores in some countries. This fact alone makes it very easy for some people to embark on the criminal road.

  　　Granted, some people might remain suspicious of my stand and believe that those perpetrators are born to be evil. Some people argue that habitual malefaction is the main root cause of high crime rate. As for those felons such as gangsters boss or professional blackguards, to break the law is to take revenge on the society which they think unfair. Besides, some people contend that such is human nature to be greedy, selfish and jealous, which accounts for many types of crimes. It is also found that some women commit economic crimes simply because they are more vain and avaricious than others.

  　　In a nutshell, I re-affirm my stand that different crimes could be combination of various elements, however, in comparison with evil nature, external factors actually play a profound influence in leading some immature or inexperienced people to go astray.

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  6.5分范文

  　1.环境对人犯罪有很大的影响，一些比较贫穷的人没有接受高等教育容易失业让他们的处境很糟糕。失去经济来源会导致犯罪。一些国家不平等体质和社会等级之差会引起不同的反社会行为。

  　　2.人类的本性很难根除，罪犯的初期教育和遗传记忆都会起到很关键的作用，人类的虚荣心和贪婪也会导致他们的悲剧。

  　　Understanding the root causes of criminal behaviors can help crime prevention, but unfortunately the discussion about the reasons of crimes has never reached a consensus. Personally, I think no single factor can explain all types of crimes and there are multiple causes of every individual crime.

  　　People who claim that circumstance is a major reason believe that the environment people live in exerts a powerful impact on them and the economic backgrounds greatly influence their behaviors. It is true that people worse off are less likely to have access to high quality education and therefore they are more likely to stay unemployed, which would worsen their situations. once people lose the source of income to support themselves, they tend to resort to illegal means like stealing from others or robbing a bank. In US, for example, it is a fact that in economically backward communities, the crime rate is much higher than that of those affluent neighborhoods. Other social problems also lead to peoples unlawful behaviors as many social study experts point out. Unfair distribution system in some countries and widening gap between different social classes, for instance, cause grievance and resentment among the general public and contribute to various anti-social behaviors.

  　　Others, however, think crimes are unavoidable due to vicious human nature that is hard to eradicate. These people always find evidence from the criminals early childhood education and believe that gene plays a decisive role in an individuals personality development. For example, a child who was born aggressive and raised by a single, drug-addicted mother is more likely to be a juvenile delinquent when he is young and commit crimes later in his life than his peers who were brought up in normal families. It is also not uncommon to hear that corruptive officials confessed their guilt behind bars admitting that it is greed and vanity that lead to their tragic ending.

  　　In conclusion, the causes of crimes are complex and it is difficulty to say which one is a more decisive factor. But one thing is certain--environment and nature often interact and work together in the process of an individual’s development, therefore both have a greatly influence on an individual’s criminal behavior.

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  高分句型——平行结构。

  严格来讲，平行结构并不属于特殊句式，而是英语语法的规范要求，但是由于遵守这个基本语法规则的中国考生太少了，平行结构也升级成了一种“特殊句式”。

  平行结构

  严格来讲，平行结构并不属于特殊句式，而是英语语法的规范要求，但是由于遵守这个基本语法规则的中国考生太少了，平行结构也升级成了一种“特殊句式”。这种结构的使用在考官范文里出现较多，最常见的形式是在表示并列关系的连接词，例如 and/or等的前后两侧用名词对名词，形容词对形容词，动词不定式对动词不定式，分词短语对分词短语，从句对从句…比如：

  1)Satisfaction is also increased by a sense of responsibility for and loyal to a team.

  2) Even when childrenuse a computer for other purposes, such as getting information or emailingfriends, it is no substitute for human interaction.

  3)Some essays are hard to understand not because they are long but because they are obscure.

  4)They will certainly be the first to help children learn what is important in life, how they areexpected to behave and what role they will play in their world.

  剑桥考官在范文中对于平行原则都是严格遵守，考生在这个写作细节句式上希望也可以向官方范文看齐。

  看到这里，同学们不难发现，考官范文以及官方剑桥书后的高分范文里，各种复杂句式并不是高分的标准，对文章的整体把握，合理运用各种句型，保证文章的逻辑以及流畅性才是最主要的。当然语法结构正确也是必不可少的评分标准之一!

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